The future city
It was raining the rivers overflowed the ocean was high tide the houses were flooded the people were stuck in their own houses some people stuck in their cars and their cars would be flooded the floating city was dropping from the sky. There was so much rain people had to go in their addicts and hide from the water. The water was freezing cold. People stranded in houses,cars and buildings that are not their homes. Animals were probably be dead because the water is to high to swim probably for cats not for dogs. It was getting higher and higher people had swim through the water. There was pipes to get water to go away someone swam to get to home and he hit it he face planted on the concrete and the sun came out for a day and it stayed for a week. When it came out people were so happy they hoped out of what they were in and everything was dry and like a fire bursting with flames.
People started to cry because it was so great to have sun back. Apparently it was always rained in floating city everyone was wowed from it. It’s not great it’s amazing. Animals were happy because they have wanted to run around the yard and just have fun. The End
Up near the top I noticed that it didn't make to much sense, you should add a coma in between "It was raining(,)the rivers overflowed
ReplyDeleteHey Madison! I really like that in your story you were really descriptive with what you wrote and it gave me a good picture in my head. To improve your story you could maybe read over it and fix where you put your punctuation marks, spelling mistakes and how you use your words :).
ReplyDeleteHi Madison,
ReplyDeletei like the way you have writen your story and it's really descriptive with what you wrote and it gave me a good picture in my head. but i think you could work on the punctuation but other then that i liked your story :)
Hi Madison, I enjoyed reading your story because it put a detailed image in my head of this city. I liked how you just had it in black and white because it made it easy to read. Maybe next time you could go over your work again and check for spelling and punctuation.
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